Fake tears

Fake tears

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Liner Notes: 

For this skirmish prompt, wanted to be creative, and took it as what if it's about an illusion of separation/brokenness?

Lyrics: 

You look broken, but you're not.
You look altered, but you're spot on.
I know my eyes are all I've got
I can't see how whole you are.

In the meadow, the earth looks broken.
At the altar, words were spoken
I never knew the threads were there
And before bed you braid my hair.
We howl long @ the moon.
And I subsume.

Chorus:
These fake tears ignore our parts
Fake tears ignore our hearts
We forget what was ours
These fake tears are a cross
Creating lines inside our arms
We remember who we are
And these fake tears dissolve.

We started open, but we're not.
Parts turned golden in the sun.
I'm often holding what you throw on the ground
These parts are needed for the sound.

Chorus:
These fake tears ignore our parts
Fake tears ignore our hearts
We forget what was ours
These fake tears are a cross
Creating lines inside our arms
We remember who we are
And these fake tears dissolve.



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Comments

mike skliar's picture

this is intense, and the lyric and music are a good fit for each other. that hesitancy in the vocal is effective, here.

MarkG's picture

Spooky sound. Your vocals are superb on this one. The fake tears are palpably painful in this story. The synth sounds and the words create a cry in the pillow, before-the-dream mood

coolparadiso's picture

Very haunting and yes intense. Youve picked out the emotion in the lyric really well.

JWHanberry's picture

I really like your orchestration. It supports the lyric/vocal perfectly. Good work.

kahlo2013's picture

Beautifully written with a wonderful use of language - evocative and sorrowful with the contrasts and images you convey. The resolution is a lovely surprise. The pacing of the music with its layers and vocal delivery is hauntingly gorgeous and accentuates the emotion of the lyric perfectly. Brilliant skirmish!

cts's picture

There's a sadness and beauty here that are equal parts compelling. I like what you've done with the music bed to support these powerful words. Fantastic job!

musicsongwriter's picture

Very beautiful, sad, lonely love song. Amazing take on the skirmish prompt. Very poignant and moving. I love your vocals, playing and instrumentation.
Nadia

Scubed's picture

Such a beautifully melancholy song! The synth sounds are really effective, and your vocals are haunting. Really enjoyed listening!

colgoo's picture

Wow!!!! I got chills listening to this. The lyrics are raw....as good skirmish writes often are and you paired the electronic music nicely.