The State of You

The State of You

LadyRed's picture



I need to feel
The weight of you
And drink in
The state of you

To feel grounded
To feel wanted
And to stop being
So haunted

Your body
Is my safe space
Where all harmony
Can take place.

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Roddy's picture

Really good writing. Each line is strong and each plays its own unique part in the lyric. Clever, concise and moving.

coolparadiso's picture

Good lyric as always! As i have said before so much in so few words

kahlo2013's picture

Love the weight and state rhymes. The desire is palpable. The last stanza is beautiful.

cts's picture

This is absolutely gorgeous. So understated and yet very weighted all at once. That last stanza is perfect.