ductapeguy's picture



Liner Notes: 

My inner critic said this is maudlin crappy schmaltz.

But I'm at the Mariposa festival, sitting next to my beautiful wife. Steve poltz is singing, there was just a beautiful sunset, and these scmaltzy, cheesy lyrics are my skirmish.

Update: Telecaster w/ max reverb on my roland cube amp and just a splash of flanger.
Orff Alto Xylophone, Orff Soprano glockenspiel


Sean McGaughey SS070519c (c) July 5, 2019 HOPE

A squall is often followed by a rainbow.
Sunrise concludes the darkest night.
The ugliest of caterpillars dissolves into goo,
becomes a painted butterfly and takes flight.

When everything you touch turns from gold to brass.
And every situation is perfectly designed to kick your ass.
You wander through crowds, yearning for a friend,
and wonder when you'll finally go around the bend

Every time you thought you could not make it through,
you did.
It"s been that way since you were a kid.
When you're holding the last thread of your rope.
Hang on, this is hope.

Please keep your comments respectful, honest, and constructive. Please focus on the song and not the demo.


metalfoot's picture

Dude, you're at MARIPOSA. I don't expect you to be writing lyrics but just basking in the music!

And I think this is really nicely done. I like especially the shorter line at the end "Hang on, this is hope." That really makes the whole thing come together just perfectly.

coolparadiso's picture

yeah works for me! Lyrics are situational usually and you set the scene nicely

mike skliar's picture

this has a wonderful flow to it, and some great lines (gold to brass/kick your ass is fantastic!) and i love the ending- great stuff, actually!!!

DeannaSweidel's picture

@metalfoot is right...."Hang on, this is hope" is a wonderful line. Hope can be the small things in life not just the big. You really brought light to that point.

colgoo's picture

Nicely written lyrics to the skirmish prompt.

kahlo2013's picture

This surprised me in a very good way. I like the images you convey and the summary in the last stanza is perfect.

JWHanberry's picture

Where has Rod McKuen gone? Long time passing. I couldn't remember his name but I googled corny 70's poet and it came right up. Yours is much better than his. If you sang it as a raging punk song the schmaltz would melt away. Go ahead...try it. Wink And don't forget that forum post from a week or so ago about not belittling your own music. Just don't.

john crossman's picture

The gold to brass/kick your ass couplet was unexpected. Yeah. It's a good start. Maybe a little schmaltzy there at the end, but that's ok.

Peter Arvidson's picture

I love the 'Hang on, this is hope' line. A song to give strength and inspiring.

Very hopeful lyric, song. I like the humor in it as well. I got a xylophone last year but never used it, never came up. Hearing your composition w/o a guitar allows me to see how I could blend the two - so, helpful to listen in that regard as well.

So, good one!